1st Beta Read of Carbon Planet: Our Destiny In The Stars

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(Art by Candice Jackson)

This is my first beta read of Carbon Planet: Our Destiny In The Stars. I decided to try someone younger than YA. Maybe she is. But someone who loves the library. My novel isn't in the library, but I thought it was worth a shot. However, beta reading is highly recommended before publication, and I'm not getting many reviews of it since I self-published the book two years ago. Unless it’s possibly linked to conspiracy theories, the horrible kinds. So, I hired a beta reader. If you're family, friends, to family ties, please read it and message me.

A young author herself at WEBNOVEL of 'Hiraeth: The Search of Life' a fantasy novel. She have more than three years experience in Content Writing. Love to help people define their vision through context. Passionate about providing quality work and timely service. With  dedication to her world of words, producing outstanding results.

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CARBON PLANET: OUR DESTINY IN THE STARS

VINCENT CASIL

--REVIEW—

By Lalba Azeem

This novel was an amazing find to blow off some pressure from my everyday hectic routine. Vincent’s novel surely quenched my mind’s thirst of having something exciting and thrilling to read.

The ever-so-descriptive and illustrative scenes crafted by the author brought a much three-dimensional vibe to the novel. It felt as if I was like any other character in the novel, an observer. Having Jacob, Junior, Sacha, Jesse, Marty, and Will disappear by what looked like being kidnapped by an extraterrestrial being and then Kelly hiring Detective Wyatt McCoy to investigate the whole case created a spotlessly perfect plot.

“I can’t swim” where everyone knows just how much of a not-so-suitable case this was for a person who isn’t that fond of water, to watching him reach the point of “There is life here” was a journey of a lifetime and this experience is unerasable from my mind.

The delicately added minute elements like Water Lynx, La Llorona, etc., and how Wyatt solved a case by taking help from the dead woman’s ghost herself made me get attached to this story more and more.

The novel’s mentions of UFOs/USOs sightings and Bessie, the Loch Ness monster of Lake Erie ignited my interest, and my heart kept asking for more. This novel has a perfect blend of urban legends, mythical creatures, and the paranormal…ABSOLUTE LOVE!

Vincent has this perfectly balanced tone of reality and fiction combined. His unique sense and originality of work were what I loved the most and which is really hard to find in an era where every other author uses the same writing style and molds the traditional fantasy/mystery story outlines into his/her own works.


--BETA READ REPORT—

What do I love?

  • The character descriptions were on point. Providing backstories to each character and taking your time in painting the whole picture inside your reader’s mind is what you aced at.
  • The plot was unique and original, and I loved that about your novel.
  • The title was on point, attention-grabbing, and had the perfect catchy tone or vibe, I might say, in it. The moment I read it, when you sent me the novel, I immediately knew my eyes were about to feast on something good, and it turned out amazing.
  • The frequent mentions of Bessie really increased my interest as I am a mythical creature-loving person, and I guess every other fantasy-loving person is.
  • I loved your explanation of all the urban legends in keen detail and not leaving the readers to research the mentioned names themselves.
  • I liked how Wyatt was afraid of water and didn’t have that much of a good childhood and ended up getting this case. It made perfect sense, he had to face his fear to solve that mystery before cancer got to him, and he did.
  • Water Lynx….love, love, and nothing less than love. I read about this about two years back about how Ojibwe thought of it as the master of all water creatures.
  • Britney's love for Wyatt added a beautiful touch to the story.
  • Ahmed’s character was what caught my attention the fastest.
  • Some dialogues were way natural and funny to read, for example; “Later, fatso” -Karen “Later, rabies” -Junior. 

Suggestions;

·         The novel's pace can be improved. The plot, no matter how interesting, but due dragging the scenes at some points, could have made some readers lose interest due to the prolonged scenes.

  • There were some major strong elements in your story. They could have been more refined; such as Ahmed’s sketches didn’t have the required weightage they should have gotten in the plot.
  • In the last chapters, where in one second Wyatt at in the North Pole and the other looking at some tadpoles…those scenes can be written more graphically and vividly. 

Overall, the novel played out great. However, some elements in the story can be polished to make it even greater. My review is based on your overall story outline, because as a reader, that what matters more to me in a story.


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